My First Attempt (updated 27march)

[Acids]

Remember Me, I was the poor sop who asked for help in designing a marquee and got NONE.    
Yes it kinda was my fault as i hadn't had a good play myself  ( lazy, i guess )

ANYWAY..     Here is my first for feedback from you..  


Oh BTW, The name
STOCKADE
is now mine.  ( all paid in full,  with cash,  No Fighting Now ok! )  

[Felsir]

I would make the title stand out a little more. For starters: make the title bigger.

About the taglines:

- The font doesn't really match the 'feel' of the marquee

- Too much text in too little space. Why not only use the tagline 'where gamers roam' or 'where boys become men' ? (I always thought that playing arcade games made me feel younger 'where men become boys again') Or go with a tougher quote to match the military feel of the marquee: 'seperates the boys from the men' (it's up to the peer to decides if they're in the boy or men camp )

[BobbyG66]

I would make the title stand out a little more. For starters: make the title bigger.

About the taglines:

- The font doesn't really match the 'feel' of the marquee

- Too much text in too little space. Why not only use the tagline 'where gamers roam' or 'where boys become men' ? (I always thought that playing arcade games made me feel younger 'where men become boys again') Or go with a tougher quote to match the military feel of the marquee: 'seperates the boys from the men' (it's up to the peer to decides if they're in the boy or men camp )

Ya, what he said.

In addition, how about some barbed wire as a border, maybe with a brick wall or something...Will help with the Stockade theme.

[maraxle]

In addition, how about some barbed wire as a border, maybe with a brick wall or something...Will help with the Stockade theme.

I really like the barbed wire border idea.  Increasing the font size is a must, too.

[Acids]

Ok, ive read what you have to say and think hey yeah, So ive done another.

Once Again, please give advice.







Spelling fixed, Not sure how i missed that one, Late Night jitters i guess. Maybe i needed more blood in my coke stream.

[maraxle]

It should be "Think You're Man Enough?"  Other than that, I like it.

[Chemixtry]

I like the marquee. Good job!

[mozzer]

I like the new one on top. Looks really good.

Just change the your to you're and you should be set.

[walls83]

It looks good but are you sure you want mel gibson on your cab.?  If I was going to put a "real" person on my cab and it was going to be military I think I would go with the boot camp drill instructor from FULL METAL JACKET.  I mean he was a real drill instructor in life.

http://www.matthewmodine.com/pictures/ermy_yelling.jpg

http://stuffthatisawesome.tripod.com/sitebuildercontent/sitebuilderpictures/ermeypoint_mug.jpg

http://www.auntie.com/dustcatchers/sideshow/sideshow/ermey-box.jpg

theres a couple pics of him but Im sure there are better ones out there.  anyways just a thought

[Acids]

My Lady thinks he is just "wonderful"  

And as this is going into the living area i thought i better keep her happy. and besides, its a good picture to boot.

[Felsir]

Two words: "print it".

[BobbyG66]

One more typo...

Change Enough.? to Enough?

Drop the period before the question mark.

[SirPeale]

Man...poor Mr. Ermey...typecast forever.

[mahuti]

What do you mean... "poor"

That guy's made a CAREER with that character.

[Acids]

One more typo...

Change Enough.? to Enough?

Drop the period before the question mark.

Without the period the question mark gets lost in the word.  I like it as it is and might have to redo it anyway as the cab has a non standard shaped marquee.

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^------------          and the corners are Very rounded with speakers either side.

Ive only just seen the cab ( about 2 hours ago )

[mahuti]

You may like it, but it will be seen as a typo by everyone that views your cab. Even the guy who prints it will probably call you. Add some extra letterspacing to the ? if you are that concerned. OR, ad an ellipses (...) before the question mark. That's not exactly correct either, but it's better than .?

[Acids]

You may like it, but it will be seen as a typo by everyone that views your cab. Even the guy who prints it will probably call you. Add some extra letterspacing to the ? if you are that concerned. OR, ad an ellipses (...) before the question mark. That's not exactly correct either, but it's better than .?

So be it.  But thanks for the input  ( thats why its here   )

[dema]

I really like your marquee. It's very impressive, especially for your first real attempt. The only thing I'd echo is removing that period before the question mark. It doesn't look right at all. I can see how the question mark would get lost in the prior word, so I'd simply add an extra space in between the word enough and the punctuation.  That would make it perfect.

Cool name for your cab as well.