What do you think of my artwork??

[jsomethin]

Just curious for opinions on my artwork. I have the CP, the marquee, and the sideart done. I'm just now working in the Bezel. I'm trying to come up with some text for the instruction card, but I haven't found anything I like yet.

Anyway, here it is:

Control Panel:

(top center will be a spinner, middle will be blue illuminated trackball.
Player 1 and two buttons are red lighted atari cones. I think I'm going with black pushbuttons.



Marquee:



Sideart:

Side 1:
Side 2:


Monitor Bezel:

[Ad_Enuff]

Fractal art? Doesnt look too bad actually....its certainly different.

I assume its raster?

[jsomethin]

Yep, fractals.

All 300dpi raster.

[SNAAKE]

VERY KOOL

Everything from scratch ? ?

[Bones]

It's difficult not to like this. I hope you go with your designs.

[mahuti]

The fractal part is fine, but the typography leaves something to be desired. It's more of an afterthought, rather than incorporated into the design. Trying to make the fractal live front and center is weakening your layout. Generally putting the good stuff right in the center reduces the dynamism of a design... there's no balance, just a big weight in the center.

The fractals are pretty, but the marquee and side art need to be "designed." 

[Cutty]

I think it's nice just the way it is. Fractals are so much tied to math, I think it would lose something not being centered, and I think the font strengthens the mathy feel to it.

[mahuti]

Nice != good. (nice does not necessarily equal good) Had I the time... I would create a few variations that could show you that it could be made better by investing more time in layout and typography. I'm not critiqueing arbitrarily here. This design COULD be made better... As the fractals suggest... math can be deceptively dynamic. Unlike the overall layout. As for the font... here it strengthens the "Cliche" feel to the design.  That font COULD be used to good effect here... but it currently is not being used to its fullest effect.

The fractal art is beautiful. Using it as a base for a concept it is fine. Using 3 different fractals with different color schemes on each, with weak typography is not tying the concept together in a way that ADDs something to the overal theme, unfortunately. Currently there is no real design... just a picture with some type on it, and that takes away from the power of the background images.   

I don't have time to do more than critque...  and won't...so jsomthin is on his own other than a few suggestions

[skyywelker]

that CP is sick!!!  i cant wait to see what it looks like on the machine....

[jsomethin]

I hear you, and I appriciate the time you took to answer.

I've tried to get the sideart (orange fractal) to match color-wise in Photoshop, but I have yet to get it close enough.

As for the use of three different fractals, I didn't want to use the same one for all.

And as for the font, I kind of like the old-school feel of it.

I'm not a designer, and I don't doubt that somebody with skills that I don't have could make it look nicer.

Again, I appriciate the comments!

Nice != good. (nice does not necessarily equal good) Had I the time... I would create a few variations that could show you that it could be made better by investing more time in layout and typography. I'm not critiqueing arbitrarily here. This design COULD be made better... As the fractals suggest... math can be deceptively dynamic. Unlike the overall layout. As for the font... here it strengthens the "Cliche" feel to the design.  That font COULD be used to good effect here... but it currently is not being used to its fullest effect.

The fractal art is beautiful. Using it as a base for a concept it is fine. Using 3 different fractals with different color schemes on each, with weak typography is not tying the concept together in a way that ADDs something to the overal theme, unfortunately. Currently there is no real design... just a picture with some type on it, and that takes away from the power of the background images.   

I don't have time to do more than critque...  and won't...so jsomthin is on his own other than a few suggestions

[SNAAKE]

- Keep the panel art as is looks great.

- For the marquee,you can try a better font with black outlines and some glow.Background is good I wouldnt change anything.

- Work on the sideart..make it more like your panel with different colors maybe.

 

[Ad_Enuff]

I would also say try to keep teh sideart and Marquee the same look and style as the CPO.

The font is something I didnt like and its rather basic in terms of what it says....

Snakes idea of black outlines and glow are also a good idea.

[Santoro]

I love the Fractals...  I do think the 1970 retro-tech font clashes with the 1999 computer-age fractals however.  The text does look like is is an afterthought.   

I think a little rework of the text will help.

[mahuti]

font= ok.

typography= not so ok.

[subcriminal]

I like the font on the marquee but it does look like a highly detailed image with plain text overlaid.
Maybe you could apply some illumination effects to the text so that the fractals appeared to be illuminating it.

[jsomethin]

Ok, I've made entirely new sideart. I still have the same font, and I'm sure the folks that didn't like the font/typography before still won't like this one. But the colors now match the CP better.

I've also added the Bezel that I've designed.

Thanks everyone for your comments both good and bad!