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AtomSmasher:

--- Quote from: ChadTower on December 15, 2006, 03:29:20 pm ---Any oil left in the world drives geopolitics.  It is by far the single largest factor in foreign relations of most first world countries.  Who has it, how much do they have, and how we can get it from them.  There isn't anything even a close second.

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Agreed, but if the world supply of oil is out, then oil will no longer be able to effect geopolitics.  When I say the world supply of oil is gone, that means there is no oil anywhere in the world.

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ChadTower:

Most of civilization will be gone by then.  When the oil starts to dwindle to that point it will cause wars like this planet hasn't seen yet.  The "alternate fuels" simply aren't going to arrive until they are required.

FrizzleFried:
Awe lets give the guy a break.   He knows not what he writes. 

I really liked the whole "tie lumber to the the roof of the Taurus" thing...   :dizzy:

THAT was some funny shiznit!   :laugh2:

danny_galaga:

--- Quote from: ChadTower on December 15, 2006, 03:36:43 pm ---
Most of civilization will be gone by then.  When the oil starts to dwindle to that point it will cause wars like this planet hasn't seen yet.  The "alternate fuels" simply aren't going to arrive until they are required.

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not if certain technologically advanced countries get their crap together and instead of pandering to certain lobby groups actually let technology do its thing rather than hinder it ;)

in your scenario, it will be the countries most reliant on oil that will suddenly be in a mad max world. people in places like papua new guinea or mongolia already live like that. they wont perceive much difference  ;)

missioncontrol:

--- Quote from: JONTHEBOMB on December 15, 2006, 11:29:38 am ---
--- Quote from: missioncontrol on December 14, 2006, 11:27:20 pm ---Not a very college worthy paper... It came off more as a rant with nothing to support it

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--- Quote from: jjd on December 15, 2006, 09:16:16 am ---I was hoping that was written by a high school freshman.  It reads like it was.

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I'll agree that I am not a great writer that's why I am a Computer Engineering major and not an English major.  Take in to account this is my first attempt at a satire.  This paper was inspired by Jonathan Swifts "A Modest Proposal" which is similar to mine in that he proposes an outrageous plan to take care of the poor.  My paper is a satire and not a reseach paper, my support is the examples I use for how people are wasting gas. 


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I meant nothing bad by this, I was just giving my constructive criticism. You will find yourself writing all kinds of papers for other classes, not just your English class, so it's better to take advantage of any feedback to make yourself a better writer. Some of your final projects in your computer classes will require a lot of technical writing, so even though you are not an English major you will still need to learn to write professionally in order to meet the requiments  of the project.

that said and done...

your introduction sentence "Gas prices are constantly rising with no end in sight." can probably be left out considering this satire is  about gas shortages rather than prices. The only other mention on prices are in the senior citizen section  "Traffic also raises gas prices so the more we can cut it the better." 


--- Quote ---To save even more on gas we should not allow any senior citizens to drive.  Senior citizens make pointless trips and drive too slow, which creates traffic.  Traffic makes cars move slow and burns precious gas.  With all these rules traffic will be almost nonexistent because many people will be working on their punishment.  Traffic also raises gas prices so the more we can cut it the better.
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The quoted text above the sentences I have in bold, really doesn't fit well with the paragraph I would actually omit the sentence "Traffic also raises gas prices so the more we can cut it the better." and use "With all these rules traffic will be almost nonexistent because many people will be working on their punishment." in a different paragraph perhaps the first sentence in the last paragraph.

You should also look at some of the words you use for example:


--- Quote ---To save even more on gas...
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I would change to:

To conserve even more on gas...

Part of writing papers in a college situation is proper word choice.

One thing that I do after writing a paper is to put it away for a few hours then go back and read through it again when you mind is clear. It is very important be very judgmental on yourself, you know exactly what you are writing, but can your audience read it and get the same feeling that you have?

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