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Main => Everything Else => Topic started by: MrInitialMan on September 16, 2024, 05:38:53 am
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May I post chapters of my story on this board, so that you all can tell me if it makes sense?
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May I post chapters of my story on this board, so that you all can tell me if it makes sense?
Sure, now that this thread is in the correct sub-forum. :cheers:
Scott
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Thank you! (Also, whoops :-[)
Badge Of The Ultimate Star Jam Fighter - Chapter 1 (https://mrinitialman.com/StandAlones/StarJam/BOTUSJF_ch01.pdf)
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One phrase that seems jarringly odd is in the first paragraph. :dunno
He played the did every time his parents
Minor formatting note: The three times that "UNE" appears in the body text, it has a dotted underline. (spellcheck marking?) The two times where it appears in "screencap" text boxes, it does not.
The rest of the excerpt appears to be solidly written from grammatical, technical, formatting, and dramatic perspectives. :cheers:
Scott
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One phrase that seems jarringly odd is in the first paragraph. :dunno
He played the did every time his parents
That is a straight-up goof. I'm usually writing this late at night
Minor formatting note: The three times that "UNE" appears in the body text, it has a dotted underline. (spellcheck marking?) The two times where it appears in "screencap" text boxes, it does not.
The rest of the excerpt appears to be solidly written from grammatical, technical, formatting, and dramatic perspectives. :cheers:
Scott
Actually, that is a leftover by the way this story is being written; the dotted line is from an <abbr> element (yes, I code HTML by hand). I'll fix it in the CSS sheet (yes, I'm doing these as webpages turned into PDFs)
Okay, I think I got the issues fixed. :)
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Sorry for being so quiet; I have been working on my story.
https://mrinitialman.com/StandAlones/StarJam/BOTUSJF_ch02.pdf
https://mrinitialman.com/StandAlones/StarJam/BOTUSJF_ch03.pdf
https://mrinitialman.com/StandAlones/StarJam/BOTUSJF_ch04.pdf
https://mrinitialman.com/StandAlones/StarJam/BOTUSJF_ch05.pdf
And currently working on Chapter 6
Also, a couple of notes. Mr. Ottey's speech patterns are based off an actual co-worker of mine who is indeed Jamaican.
Also, if grammar seems weird, or things don't make sense, please recall I'm typing this in an HTML editor and I may miss things.
And I knew many an "Anna" when I was in high school.
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FINALLY COMPLETE!
https://www.mrinitialman.com/StandAlones/StarJam/starjamfighter.xhtml
I would like your opinions on it, please :-)